1. You want to use something that you care strongly for, know what you felt and feel, and something that the readers can understand where you're coming from.
2. Details keep the readers in, but generalizations keep them away from reading more/keep them out.
3. Don't start each sentence with the same word, keep the "rhythm" different and interesting.
Try to make connections so the reader is more interested in reading the story
Use the hook to your advantage to get the readers to want to read more
Think of your story/essay as a camera lens
1. Victoria Bui wrote this story.
2. It's about not texting and driving, keeping your eyes on the road and not your phone screen.
3. Victoria does not support people texting and driving, she believes that no one would want to lose someone they love just because the person wanted to use their phone when they were driving. "If they knew that the person they’re texting was driving, they would not want to have that guilt that it was their fault that they got in a crash and people got hurt or even killed them. That feeling would end up always be flowing in their minds and feeling like its their fault like “Why did I even text them?” "
4. She didn't really say how the other side may feel, but she did say that people always think that they can multi-task when they really can't.
5. Victoria cleverly backs up one of her statements, about the driver blaming their parents for wondering where they are, with, "That's when pulling over or having one of your passengers respond becomes an option." This gives any wishy-washy thoughts no chance to change the story.
6. There are no direct quotes, but theres is a "quote" of what someone may think if they kill someone else by texting and driving.
7. They wrote in 2nd/3rd person.
http://www.volsvoice.com/18753/opinion/eyes-on-the-road-not-your-phone/
1. Hana Ali wrote this story.
2. This story is about the stubble Syrian refugees are having to survive and that they still are humans.
3. Hana doesn't really have too much of an opinion in her story, she's trying to let people know that they're (the refugees) are still human and that they deserve a chance as much as we do. "Many wonder why refugees can’t return to their homeland. Well, just like many of us would be, they are fearful of terroristic threats. In reality however, they are experiencing terrorism first-hand. "
4. She did counter her own statement with addressing that some people fear that they are terrorists, but she easily parried back by saying that the U.S. can interview them, go over medical conditions, and security screenings.
5. The story is a bit wishy-washy but doesn't fall apart, Hana back up each statement cleverly.
6. There aren't any quotes.
7. She wrote in 3rd and 2nd person.
http://thsoutlook.com/top-stories/2016/02/11/syrian-refugees-struggle-for-survival/
1. Kiara Nieto.
2. This story is about how students express themselves at school and why it's important.
3. Kiara herself doesn't really have an opinion on it, except for saying, "Expressing who you are and what you like is a big part of our lives and it’s good to know when other people appreciate the same things you do, such as art, music, and thoughts "
4. She just kept along with how students express themselves, nothing else.
5. There's no way Kiara could've backed up her opinion about expressing ones self, so it can be wishy-washy, like if someone brought up self-esteem then there is really no way for her to say "well, you can..." or something. And just because it can make someone feel good, doesn't always mean they would like to.
6. There are quotes in this story.
7. she wrote in mostly 3rd person.
http://www.silversabreonline.com/opinion/2016/02/19/express-yourself/
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